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Do you know what it's like by *blue-rose:iconblue-rose:





Do you know what it’s like
To cry of hours for no reason? … I do
Just crying because it feels like
The only thingy you can do
Because no just one thing
Is worth crying over
But everything feels like it’s amounting
To something inside and needs to escape
Because it has nowhere else to go
Mouth closed
Who is there to talk to?
Ears blocked
Will they ever stop yelling?
Heart barricaded
Will it ever be in return?
Body frozen
What could I possibly do?
Eyes open
I can’t see the problem but the tears still come
Why does it feel so shameful
to cry, to weep, to sob, to ball my eyes out
To healthily express emotion
Do you know what it’s like
To feel like you’re a failure
For just being who you are? … I do
I failed my teachers
By making them think I was smart
I failed my parents
By trying to give them what they wanted
I failed my friends
By not being there when they needed me
I failed myself
When I tried to ignore
The pain I was causing myself
And these are small reasons as to why I cry
But to cry because it feels right
I don’t see the logic

©2004-2009 *blue-rose
:iconblue-rose:

Author's Comments

i wrote this about two or three weeks ago, i'm a little unsure. i was going to do a photoshop immage with this written on and old scrunched up piece of lined paper, but i couldn't get it to look right.

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:iconinsomniartist:
:hug: I love it.

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Living makes me sick, so sick I wish I'd die...
:iconblue-rose:
i'm glad that you liked it, and also thank you for the fav

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mi mano es mi amigo donde está el cuarto de baño
:icondreamheaven:
:petting: I hate commenting on emotional stuff... makes me sound horrid... i just give you a :hug: instead

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:heart: :nod:


Kel :heart: Adam
:iconblue-rose:
thanx kel:hug:. i don't like commenting on emotional stuff either, however i can write emotional stuff :nod:

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mi mano es mi amigo donde está el cuarto de baño
:iconsmokeybear:
I read this earlier, but didn't have the words to comment properly, and they still escape me now. It's emotional, and raw, and that's good, but also painful because you can kind of taste the raw emotion and pain that is poured into this kind of poetry. I like it because it seems heartfelt, and true, but I dislike it because it causes me discomfort. But to write so well that you provoke these emotions in people is to be commended upon. :hug:
:iconreadmyspine:
"I failed myself
When I tried to ignore
The pain I was causing myself"

These lines address a common experience, using pithy and laconic language. I like this piece because it's real, however it makes me tense my muscles and screw up my face because,like Sarah said, "It's emotional, and raw, and that's good, but also painful because you can kind of taste the raw emotion and pain that is poured into this kind of poetry".
:iconnous-sommes-vous:
well... there you go. :petting:
everyone knows what it's like to cry (even if they don't want to admit); it's a healthy way to express emotions; and sometimes yes, it's all you can really do. crying isn't shameful, it's not like it's not meant to happen.
there's not much i can say to this emotionally-charged piece. it's good, though, in a way that i wish it wasn't written only so that you didn't feel that way.
also, you're not a failure. definately absolutely 250% positively for-sure: you are not a failure. you're growing, you're learning, and we all make mistakes. what's that annoying but age-old expression thing? "learn from your mistakes and move on." some people have problems with the moving on part, though.
:hug:

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g.
:iconblue-rose:
there is another age-old expression "Gaby's always right"

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mi mano es mi amigo donde está el cuarto de baño

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